A text about my fashion-future-plans. IS THIS SILLY WRITTEN?
I’m 13, let me know if this isn’t proper for me to write.
and if it’s boring or whatever. Just let me know what you think.
should i have paragraphs in the text?
I would love if you came up with new and less boring sentences.
When i’ve finished High School, I want to move to New York City, and study fashion.
I want to become a stylist.
I’m gonna apply to a fashion-school called FIT, Fashion Institute of Technology.
The school is in the middle of New York City, 7th avenue, Manhattan.
I want to have an apartment there, and live with a friend. While i’m going to school, I really want to have an internship with a magazine, like Teen Vogue or Elle. Fashion isn’t a big industry in Norway, so that’s why I wanna move to a fashion capital. This isn’t just a 13-year-old-girl’s fantasy. I wanna make a career out of this.
For me, fashion has nothing to do with superficiality.
Fashion is art, it’s expressive, and it’s fun!
It needs to be written in proper English — going to, NOT gonna, capital I in I’m, full sentences, proper paragraphs…I know how hard the bloody Internet has made things for kids, especially for kids whose first language is not English, with all of the idiotic punctuation faces that you are almost forced to use because people don’t seem to understand what you’re saying most of the time if you don’t, smilies and texting and all that nonsense, but there is written English and spoken English, just as you wouldn’t, I would hope, wear a bikini to a funeral or a prom dress surfing, you don’t write as you would speak to your friends at a party.
As for the content, it’s fine, it is your true expression of who you are and what you want to do — be careful about changing things that come from your personality to suit what other people think. You’re too young to know this yet, I imagine, but there is such a thing as “death by committee” — it is as toxic to an artist as hoof and mouth to sheep!
And FIT is a great school, DO get accepted BEFORE you move to New York, but I just want to point out, if fashion isn’t that big an industry in Norway, maybe you were put in Norway to CHANGE that. If you are an artist, you are a leader and not a follower. Fashion designers are like pigeons in New York, only the majority of pigeons eat better. Good luck!